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It has been more than 40 years since man first landed on the moon. Some people think that space research is a waste of money. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is sometimes argued that
space
 exploration is a money-wasting investment. While I agree with
this
 to some extent, I
also
 believe that
space
 research can bring about some undeniable benefits to human being. On the one hand, there are several reasons why investing in
space
 research is regarded as a waste of money. Admittedly,
space
 exploration projects usually require a huge initial investment, but it is not guaranteed that there would be some fruitful findings at the end of the projects.
As a result
,
this
 would lead to some doubts on the effectiveness of these long-term researches.
In addition
, a considerable amount of money spent on
space
 research would put governments under a financial pressure, resulting in a limited
room
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run
 of budget for other governmental spending
such
 as improving public
healthcare
Suggestion
health care
 services or enhancing education system.
On the other hand
, I would argue that
space
 exploration might have some foreseeable benefits.
First
, undertaking
space
 studies would help people to develop a deeper understanding of the universe, contributing to the improvement of existing literature and theoretical concepts.
Second
, the outcomes of these researches might lead to a number of economic advantages.
For instance
, new planets found out by
space
 scientists may provide travel industry with a new tourist destination.
In addition
, these promising lands can serve as a new place to live
for
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in
 human, helping governments to deal with the over-population problem. In conclusion, despite the disadvantages of carrying out
space
 studies, it seems to me that the advantages are more significant.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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