Many childhood diseases can now be prevented through the use of vaccines. Should parents be made by law to immunise their children against common diseases or should individuals have the right to choose not to immunise their children?

These days, it is being typical to
use
vaccination not only for children who receives a multiple vaccines for different kind of disease usually before the turn 7 year old, but
also
, for adults who want to keep safe from the seasonal flu
for example
.
However
, some people think that
the
people in general
they
have the right to decide
wthere
introduces two alternatives
whether
where
they will allow their children to be vaccinated or not. While, others believe every child need to be vaccinated.In my opinion,
vaccenses
immunogen consisting of a suspension of weakened or dead pathogenic cells injected in order to stimulate the production of antibodies
vaccines
are very important due to their role in
prevent
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preventing
diseases especially,
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diseases, especially
for
kides
a young person of either sex
kids
who are not strong enough to fight against microbes and bacteria.
In
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On
the one hand, people who reject to involve the law in
this
case. It is a decision can both parents take. On top of that the, father and the mother know what it is the best for
thir
of them or themselves
their
child and they will never do
any thing
an indefinite thing
anything
will harm their kids.
likewise
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Likewise
,
this
vaccination could be harmful sometime.
For instance
,
their
in or at that place
there
is many infants died because of these
vacciances
being unoccupied
vacancies
vaccines
.
This
one of many reasons who made the parents think
twoic
two times
twice
before
alloweds
make it possible through a specific action or lack of action for something to happen
allows
allowed
their children to
recevied
get something; come into possession of
receive
.
On the other hand
, despite that fact of how important these vaccines are for the
chidren
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children's
children
child's
child
health.
Also
it
is protect
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protects
them from any
deseases
an impairment of health or a condition of abnormal functioning
diseases
disease
.
In addition
, the benefit of been
vaccintion
taking a vaccine as a precaution against contracting a disease
vaccination
is outwigh
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outweighs
is outweigh
is outweighs
is outweighed
the risks.
Furthermore
, because of some irresponsible parents who prefer to take the risk and not
use
vaccines for their
children we
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children, we
need to have a strict
role
a principle or condition that customarily governs behavior
rule
to force everyone to
use
vaccinations. In conclusion, in some countries they start to
ue
put into service; make work or employ for a particular purpose or for its inherent or natural purpose
use
the law to compel people to
use
vaccinations because of
that the
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that, the
death average had decreased in
this countries
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this country
these countries
which, encourage other countries to follow
this
step to reduce the
infents
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infant's
infants'
health problems.
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