Many childhood diseases can now be prevented through the use of vaccines. Should parents be made by law to immunise their children against common diseases or should individuals have the right to choose not to immunise their children?

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These days, it is being typical to

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vaccination not only for children who receives a multiple vaccines for different kind of disease usually before the turn 7 year old, but

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, for adults who want to keep safe from the seasonal flu

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they will allow their children to be vaccinated or not. While, others believe every child need to be vaccinated.In my opinion,

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immunogen consisting of a suspension of weakened or dead pathogenic cells injected in order to stimulate the production of antibodies

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preventing

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diseases, especially

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taking a vaccine as a precaution against contracting a disease

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, because of some irresponsible parents who prefer to take the risk and not

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Clear and correct grammar

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