In some countries the average weight of people is increasing and their levels of health and fitness are decreasing. What do you think are the causes of these problems and what measures could be taken to solve them?

The increase of overweight people in comparison with the fall of the activity levels that help them to have a good health as a concerning problem in recent years. To deal with
issue, I believe that both the government and individuals must be responsible to do it together. The overweight leads to
a variety
of inconveniences for people in their daily life and there are two main reasons of
of all, in some developed countries, the
sources are extremely
expensive so
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expensive, so
people need to find out the other solution, it is junk
, according to the analysis of many scientists, fat
contains lots of harmful substances which affect to the health.
, people are vulnerable to the public environment due to their asymmetry body.
For instance
, people do not want to gym rooms because they feel embarrassed when standing in front of others.
As a result
, they may suffer from many detrimental diseases
as stroke. To handle with
problem, the government should add a high tax for junk
which bring some detrimental issues to their citizens.
In addition
, people ought to have a diet to control the amount of calories in their meals.
, playing some sports
as gymnastic, swimming and so on can bring benefits to their health and keep fit. To conclude, the rise of overweight people is a debatable issue in many countries
nowadays but
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nowadays, but
I completely believe that if people are responsible for themselves,
number is able to reduce in the near future.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation


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Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sedentary
  • obesity
  • overweight
  • physical activity
  • sedentary lifestyle
  • exercise
  • unhealthy diet
  • fast food
  • urbanization
  • modernization
  • stress
  • awareness
  • education
  • government intervention
  • policies
  • promotion
  • sports
  • fitness programs
  • health education
  • taxation
  • public transportation
  • infrastructure
  • parks
  • recreational spaces
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