Stress related illness are becoming increasingly common. What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest?

It is irrefutable that
stress
related
illness
are increasing rapidly. In
this
essay I
intent
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intend
to discuss its
causes including
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causes, including
increased working hours and bad
diet
.
This
essay will
further
explore some solutions to increased
stress
related
illness
, like
work
-life balance and
good healthy
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a good healthy diet
diet
. In
this
competitive world, people are supposed to
work
hard to maintain or to get a higher position. An Important reason for burgeoning
stress
-related
illness
is that in a typical corporate world People are assigned with more jobs than their capacity due to which they are enforced to
work
for extra hours. For instant companies fire their employees if they failed to meet their sales target. Sometimes people choose to climb the corporate ladder for social status at a cost of imbalanced
work
life. Another main reason for
stress
related
illness
is that people are less conscious for their eating habits. We are living in a consumerist
culture
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culture, therefore
therefore
to meet with their needs people are becoming workaholic. So people are less
concentrating
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concentrated
on their
diet
and becoming more reliable on ready cooked food
instead
of homemade healthy
diet
. To resolve the issue
under consideration one
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under consideration, one
should reach
in to
expresses motion to a point on, or within, something
into
the roots.
Firstly people
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Firstly, people
should themselves decide their
work
balance ratio and
also
give priority to their family, friends and relatives.
Secondly along
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Secondly, along
with
work
people should spend their few hours of a day for some physical exercise, meditation,
etc
continuing in the same way
etc.
and
also
follow healthy eating habits.
Thirdly and
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Thirdly, and
most
importantly government
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importantly, government
should
also
form some rules and regulations maximum working hours, balanced working life and human rights. In recapitulation, I reiterate that in
this
fast life
style
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style, stress
stress
related
illness
are rapidly growing.
This
essay discussed main reasons for
this
are increased
work
pressure and wrong eating styles.
Further
also
suggested some ideas to resolve
this
problem in twofold: focusing on
work
-life balance and healthy food
diet
plans.

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