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Scientists believe that computers will become more intelligent than human beings. Some people find it a positive development while others think it is negative development. Discuss both points and give your own opinion.

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Researchers are working day and night to develop new technologies, due to which concept of Artificial intelligence is becoming increasingly popular. Some people accept it as a blessing while others are taking it as a curse. In
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 essay, I shall discuss both the positive and negative sides and
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 give my opinion. On the positive side, there are numerous advantages of
computer
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a computer
computers
. Nowadays, there is widespread use of computers and
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 other technology devices in corporate offices, hospitals, supermarkets, schools, etc.
Main reasons
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The main reasons
 behind its extreme usage are reduced
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, cost, increased efficiency and speed. Computers can do multiple tasks easily with more efficiently and that too with less
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 and premium quality.
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, robots can produce identical units in a very short
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 as compared to a human.
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, chances of rejections due to quality control are
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 rare against
manmade
not of natural origin; prepared or made artificially
man-made
 things. People can save their
time
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 by computers and can spend their precious
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 for family and leisure. On the downside, due to increased usage of computers, the demand for
labourors
someone who works with their hands; someone engaged in manual labor
labourers
labours
 has been reduced dramatically which tends to increased unemployment.
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, due to technology development in the year 2005, many employees had been removed from their offices which raised the unemployment rate by 15%. Another major drawback is people getting stuck behind computers due to which the rate of computer fatigue increased.
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, there are numerous ways to reduce negative impacts. It is irrefutable that advantages of computers outweigh its disadvantages. Computers are made by human and it
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 requires human interaction to complete any task. Human has emotions, they can motivate, inspire and give directions which computers can’t.
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, computers can’t stimulate.
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, computers can never replace the human being. In conclusion, I would like to reiterate that there are infinite benefits of computer technology against a few disadvantages.
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