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Nowadays people live in a society where consumer goods are relatively cheaper to buy. Do you think the advantages far outweigh its disadvantages?

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There is no doubt that these days consumer goods are economical to purchase in the society people live in.
Although
 buying various items
on
Suggestion
at
 low prices has a few drawbacks, I believe it has many merits,
such
 as accessibility to all and easy to replace the goods. One of the main disadvantages of purchasing goods on economical
price
 is over-purchasing.
For example
, it has been observed that people end up buying even those things which they do not really need, just due to their low prices.
This
 causes over-spending their hard-earned money resulting in fewer savings and cluttering their homes with unwanted items. Availability of low-priced consumption goods has several benefits.
Firstly
, due to their economical
price
, each and every person usually have access to them.
In other words
,
such
 items are affordable to
all irrespective
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all, irrespective
 of their social status.
For instance
, unlike
past
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the past
, home appliances,
such
 as food factory, are now inexpensive due to the presence of a variety of manufacturers,
thus
 they could be bought at an economical
price
.
Secondly
, replacing items, nowadays, are now easier than in the past. To illustrate, if a piece of furniture gets damaged, people often try to replace it with a new one, rather than getting it repaired.
Such
 human behaviour has now been possible due to having access to cheap
price
 consumer goods. In conclusion, in my opinion, regardless of the drawbacks, access to low-priced goods in today's society has numerous benefits, to which affordability and
is
of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
its
 ease of replacement are a few to mention.
Nevertheless
, it is recommended that people try not to over-spend their money on the items that are useless for them, so that others who are actually in need of those things, could be benefited.
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