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Economic progress is one way to measure a country’s success. Some people believe that there are other factors should be considered when measuring a success of a country. What are other factors? Do you think there is a factor that is more important?

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Some people argue that the economic development is the only factor that could determine how a nation grows and changes.
However
, I believe that there are many other essential factors measuring
this
 success. The
first
 factor would be environmental conditions which are of vital importance to human life. The growth of a
country
 could not be regarded as a success if it has a robust economy while its natural habitats are destroyed severely and the environment is polluted. It seems to me that
this
 unsustainable development is a failure as the survival of numerous people is being threatened. Another important indicator is the social stability, which is related to social programs and social service. It becomes clear that no one wants to live in a
country
 which is wealthy, but full of social unrest,
such
 as prostitution, public violence or human trafficking. If the unemployment could get assistance and subsidies or a minority could get equal opportunities of education and employment, we can say that
this
country
 is advanced.
However
, the most important factor is the political system because it has an enormous impact on other factors,
thus
 measuring the development of nations. From the economic perspective, a peaceful nation would attract investment from multinational companies, and in the long-term, it is political policies that would make a significant contribution to the well-being of that
country
. In fact, in some countries, terrorism, rebellion, and revolution due to a multi-party system had damaged the structure of the economy and deterred enterprises from operating and investing. From the social perspective, the policies of local authorities directly affect the community.
For example
, the poverty could be shaken off if the government allocate
fund
Suggestion
funds
 to
this
pressure
Suggestion
pressing
 issue in a proper way. The efficiency of policies in terms of dealing with social problems is definitely a sign of success. In conclusion, I would contend that what makes a
country
 successful is not its GDP or other economic indicators, but its environment, social harmony and particularly its stable political system.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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