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Public libraries should provide books and not waste their limited resources on expensive high-tech media such as software, videos or DVDs. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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With the advent of Digitalization in all streams, high-tech media has changed aspects of our lives in a rapid and effective way. Some people brace the idea of libraries offering softwares, videos or DVDs apart from books, whereas many are hostile to the proposal of having the same. I tend to agree that libraries must be equipped with
such
 high-tech media devices. To start with, these days people
have moved
Suggestion
move
are moving
 on from old fashioned traditional ways of reading, to new age gadgets which not only saves time but
also
 helps them in fetching advanced knowledge without extra efforts. A telling example is a student preferring to search meaning of a word on
internet
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the internet
 and can read a lot about it rather than searching catalogues or dictionaries available in the library. Considering the same, it can be seen that people are inclined towards innovations and new styles.
On the contrary
, different people have different individual preferences.
Still there
Accept comma addition
Still, there
 are many people, who prefer to read
hard copy
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a hard copy
 of the book in the
silence
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silent
 zone while sitting on the arm chair.
Moreover
, many still
feels
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feel
 that reading books on
computer
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the computer
a computer
 will deteriorate their
eyesite
normal use of the faculty of vision
eyesight
 and are not willing to move on to computers.
Also
, to a few using
computer
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computers
 without librarian assistance is, in
itself is
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itself, is
 a monstrous task to them. One could draw the
conculsion
a position or opinion or judgment reached after consideration
conclusion
 that high-tech media
is
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are
 a part of our life now. Public libraries should accept the preferences of both
type
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types
 of readers and should provide the
felixibilty
the property of being flexible; easily bent or shaped
flexibility
, and leave it
upto
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up to
 the people to opt the medium they prefer.
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