some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared freely. discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

In
this
era of freedom of speech and democracy, restricting
information
for the vague sake of public security and the national interest seem irrational to some when
other opine
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the other opine
that
information
should be made public when authority deem fit. I personally believe that,
scientific
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scientifically
, academic arena and business can greatly be
benifited
financial assistance in time of need
benefited
benefitted
with easy accessibility of data.
To begin
with, the sensitive
information
that could penetrate the public security, leads to public outcry, hands over technologies to terrorist groups and facilitates corporate monopoly
desevre
be worthy or deserving
deserve
to be scrutinized before making them available to common people. In
this
digital era the news spreads like a wildfire and to
maintaine
keep in a certain state, position, or activity; e.g., "keep clean"
maintain
global
peace we
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peace, we
need to put a check on every
peice
a separate part of a whole
piece
of sensitive
information
.
For instance
, if nuclear data is shared
with
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by
all the nations for the purpose of research, the world will soon be on the verge of extinction, no matter it has a potential for the betterment of
human race
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the human race
.
Secondly
, researchers, rely heavily on the easy
availablity
the quality of being at hand when needed
availability
of relevant data and past discoveries, if access to
such
a resource is prohibited, newer
discovries
the act of discovering something
discoveries
and inventions will stand still. The history proves that
human race
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the human race
has advanced through
discovries
the act of discovering something
discovery
discoveries
and invention of new technologies and their free access to
masses
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the masses
.
For example
, the internet is probably the most useful invention of the modern age, and if the US
millitary
of or relating to the study of the principles of warfare
military
had not made it public, we would still
been
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be
living in pre internet era. In conclusion,
information
has limited value when it is curbed and not shared with great minds. For the true global progress, restriction on important
information
souces
the place where something begins, where it springs into being
sources
should be debarred.

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