Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#people #choices

It is undeniable that, people in our fast-developing world, confronted with myriad of

situtaions

the general state of things; the combination of circumstances at a given time

situations

that arouse a sense as there are so many decisions which should be made on

selection

Suggestion

the selection

in their

everday

found in the ordinary course of events

everyday

life. I strongly concur with that statement and would put forward an idea in which the reasons of that rest on our tremendously advanced life. The

first

and crucial factor of that

hertbreaking

causing or marked by grief or anguish

heartbreaking

heart-breaking

advance is

manifestation

Suggestion

a manifestation

the manifestation

of manufacturers. They have flourished and been making

effort

Suggestion

an effort

efforts

to carry on that via not only enhancing their

outputs'

Suggestion

output

output's

quality but

Accept comma addition

quality, but

also

via diversification of sorts of their products, as well.

For instance

, when one

goliath

(Old Testament) a giant Philistine warrior who was slain by David with a slingshot

Goliath

like Apple or Nike produce

brand new product

Suggestion

a brand new product

, other manufacturers in black market will

plagiarit

someone who uses another person's words or ideas as if they were his own

plagiarist

the idea and fabricate its own products which are splitting image of the original one or with slightly different feature and with

new brand

Suggestion

the new brand

new brands

a new brand

As a result

, customer will be baffled by numerous of alternatives.

Second factor

Suggestion

The second factor

, that the condition stems from, is the

attratctive

pleasing to the eye or mind especially through beauty or charm

attractive

embellishment of the product that cajoles consumer to purchase it, regardless if it is vital or not.

Consequently

, the person encounters with large amount of versions of the output that may put him in

dilemma

Suggestion

a dilemma

. To illustrate that

botiques

a shop that sells women's clothes and jewelry

boutiques

can be perfect example, in which clothes are decorated so

adorabally

in an adorable manner

adorably

adorable

that catch a person's eyes smoothly. The person, that conjured up by the captivating picture of the outfit, enters inside where he will be faced with manifold of them. The conclusion to be drawn is that, perhaps, people cannot recognise their choice-making progress that happens without careful consideration, but our life

is abound

Suggestion

abounds

with choices.

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Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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To conclude
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Finally
In a nutshell
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6Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
18Grammar mistakes
 

4 paragraphs

270 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.5

Complete response

7.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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overwhelmed
decision fatigue
paralysis by analysis
consumerism
globalization
personal autonomy
market saturation
option overload
decision-making process
psychological well-being
buyer's remorse
customization
trade-offs
minimalism
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Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Include an introduction and conclusion

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