Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

It is undeniable that, people in our fast-developing world, confronted with myriad of
situtaions
the general state of things; the combination of circumstances at a given time
situations
that arouse a sense as there are so many decisions which should be made on
selection
Suggestion
the selection
in their
everday
found in the ordinary course of events
everyday
life. I strongly concur with that statement and would put forward an idea in which the reasons of that rest on our tremendously advanced life. The
first
and crucial factor of that
hertbreaking
causing or marked by grief or anguish
heartbreaking
heart-breaking
advance is
manifestation
Suggestion
a manifestation
the manifestation
of manufacturers. They have flourished and been making
effort
Suggestion
an effort
efforts
to carry on that via not only enhancing their
outputs'
Suggestion
output
output's
quality but
Accept comma addition
quality, but
also
via diversification of sorts of their products, as well.
For instance
, when one
goliath
(Old Testament) a giant Philistine warrior who was slain by David with a slingshot
Goliath
like Apple or Nike produce
brand new product
Suggestion
a brand new product
, other manufacturers in black market will
plagiarit
someone who uses another person's words or ideas as if they were his own
plagiarist
the idea and fabricate its own products which are splitting image of the original one or with slightly different feature and with
new brand
Suggestion
the new brand
new brands
a new brand
.
As a result
, customer will be baffled by numerous of alternatives.
Second factor
Suggestion
The second factor
, that the condition stems from, is the
attratctive
pleasing to the eye or mind especially through beauty or charm
attractive
embellishment of the product that cajoles consumer to purchase it, regardless if it is vital or not.
Consequently
, the person encounters with large amount of versions of the output that may put him in
dilemma
Suggestion
a dilemma
. To illustrate that
botiques
a shop that sells women's clothes and jewelry
boutiques
can be perfect example, in which clothes are decorated so
adorabally
in an adorable manner
adorably
adorable
that catch a person's eyes smoothly. The person, that conjured up by the captivating picture of the outfit, enters inside where he will be faced with manifold of them. The conclusion to be drawn is that, perhaps, people cannot recognise their choice-making progress that happens without careful consideration, but our life
is abound
Suggestion
abounds
with choices.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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