Advertising discourages people from being different individuals by making us all want to do the same and look the same. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is true that advertising

have become

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has become

an increasingly significant part of our society, some people claim that because of the impact of advertisements, people begin to look all the same. From my perspective, I can only partly agree with the assertion. There are various reasons why people insist that advertising discourage people from being different individuals.

First

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and foremost, in order to promote sales, some brand

have invested

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has invested

considerably large sum of money into advertising campaign, which have persuaded a majority of people to purchase the same products.

For instance

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as a result

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of apple's successful advertising, masses of people on the street are using an

IPhone

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iPhone

. These kind of popularity

make

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makes

it much

difficult

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more difficult

for us to distinguish an individual's personality based on the product they use.

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, the celebrities shown on those advertisements shared similar characteristic of appearance. That could lead the public to narrow standard of aesthetic judgments. Even worse, those campaigns usually emphasize on mainstream lifestyle as well as the similar trend of fashion, which continues to make the society less diverse.

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, I believe some advertisements

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have

adverse effect

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an adverse effect

adverse effects

the adverse effect

. Technological development has brought some changes to the advertising industry. Nowadays, different people will receive different kinds of advertisements based on their internet searching histories or shopping records. Because of the personalized advertising, it is highly likely that people's taste will become much more diverse in the future. Apart from that, more and more internet

influencers

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who are quite

independently

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independent

minded

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encourage the public to appreciate different forms of beauty.

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, not all the advertisings are aiming at persuading people to follow the same trend and appear the same look. In conclusion, while I agree that some advertisements have

negative influence

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a negative influence

on developing diversity, I believe that part of them promote individual personality.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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300 words

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Advertising discourages people from being different individuals by making us all want to do the same and look the same. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Include an introduction and conclusion

The plans below show the site of an airport now and how it will look after redevelopment next year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Genetically engineered food is an important issue in modern society. Some people think that it will improve people's lives in many ways. Others feel that it may be a threat to life on earth. Discuss both opinions and give your opinion.

The images below explain the process of how pollutants from modern life becomeacid rain that in turn pollutes the environment and the food chain.

Some university students want to learn about other subjects in addition to their main subjects. Others believe it is more important to give all their time and attention to studying for a qualification. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.