Advertising discourages people from being different individuals by making us all want to do the same and look the same. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is true that advertising
have become
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has become
an increasingly significant part of our society, some people claim that because of the impact of advertisements, people begin to look all the same. From my perspective, I can only partly agree with the assertion. There are various reasons why people insist that advertising discourage people from being different individuals.
First
and foremost, in order to promote sales, some brand
have invested
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has invested
considerably large sum of money into advertising campaign, which have persuaded a majority of people to purchase the same products.
For instance
,
as a result
of apple's successful advertising, masses of people on the street are using an
IPhone
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iPhone
. These kind of popularity
make
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makes
it much
difficult
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more difficult
for us to distinguish an individual's personality based on the product they use.
Furthermore
, the celebrities shown on those advertisements shared similar characteristic of appearance. That could lead the public to narrow standard of aesthetic judgments. Even worse, those campaigns usually emphasize on mainstream lifestyle as well as the similar trend of fashion, which continues to make the society less diverse.
Nonetheless
, I believe some advertisements
also
have
adverse effect
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an adverse effect
adverse effects
the adverse effect
. Technological development has brought some changes to the advertising industry. Nowadays, different people will receive different kinds of advertisements based on their internet searching histories or shopping records. Because of the personalized advertising, it is highly likely that people's taste will become much more diverse in the future. Apart from that, more and more internet
influencers
who are quite
independently
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independent
minded
also
encourage the public to appreciate different forms of beauty.
Therefore
, not all the advertisings are aiming at persuading people to follow the same trend and appear the same look. In conclusion, while I agree that some advertisements have
negative influence
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a negative influence
on developing diversity, I believe that part of them promote individual personality.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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