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Some people say that E- books and modern technology will totally replace traditional newspaper and magazines to what extent do you agree or disagree.

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There is a common belief that the e-books and other modern technologies are going to replace the newspapers and the magazines. I completely agree, with the rapid development of the
internet
 technologies and its penetration
in to
expresses motion to a point on, or within, something
into
 the masses, the people are getting
access
 to the news and infotainment faster than ever before. Before
digital revolution
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the digital revolution
, the people used to read newspapers and magazines to get their daily dose of information. There were some downsides to it, the masses
didn’t had
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didn’t have
access
 to the media on the go or whenever they need because they have to wait until the newspapers or the magazines get published. Over the past decade, the
internet
 has changed everything, humans now have
accesses
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access
 to the data they need in their palm, through the mobile devices.
For example
, earlier my family used to get the newspapers delivered daily and the magazines once in a while, but now we
ended
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have ended
 the subscription because we all have
access
 to the
internet
 and the mobile devices. Till
couple
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a couple
 of years ago, I used to buy books from the offline stores and now I have all the books I need in the amazon kindle. There are still people who prefer reading newspapers rather than going online, but I believe they are
minority
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a minority
the minority
. In the developed economies, where the
internet
 penetration is higher, the public
prefer
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prefers
 reading the news and the entertainment from online and
as a result
, newspapers have already become legacy. To conclude, modern day technologies are changing the way the people communicate with each other and the way the they
access
 the data. All the legacy systems like newspapers and magazines will be replaced with e-books and e-magazines sooner or later.
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