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Write about the following topic: Internet social media have become very popular. To what extent do you think this is a good or bad thing? Why do you think this is the case? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.

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Nowadays, human is living in a constantly evolving
world
 and social media becomes more common in the daily life of everyone. It has affected us in various ways, and in my opinion, there are both benefits and
drawbacks
Suggestion
drawback
 effects. There are many advantages of using social media,
first
 of all, it gives us instant access to news on almost any areas that we followed. Thanks to the Internet, people can easily update lots of information to social media so that everyone could approach news as fast as possible.
Moreover
, social media is more likely starting to replace other forms of entertainment as it is more beneficial. Not only that, internet, social media connects people around the
world
 and people can keep in touch with their friends,
families even
Accept comma addition
families, even
 if they are anywhere in the
world
 as long as they have access to the Internet.
On the other hand
, misusing of social media could bring lots of drawbacks to the users. As many pages contain offensive content like violent or sexual images and it has a huge effect on people, especially young people.
Also
, the crime rate increasing rapidly,
for example
, they can use the Internet to steal people’s money.
In addition
, parents find it difficult to control what their children see online because they do not always know who their children are chatting to. The abuse of social media
also
 has the result of isolating people and discouraging real interaction as many teenagers choose to make friends online
instead
 of mixing with their peers in the real
world
. In conclusion, social media has certainly revolutionised communication between people, but not all of the outcomes of
this
 revolution have been positive.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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