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In order to study at university, students are required to pay expensive tuition fees. Not all students can afford them, so some people think that university education should be free for everyone. To what extent do you agree or disagree

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Education
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 is an essential ingredient in order to succeed in life.
However
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, owing to the exorbitant fees being charged, getting enrolled in a university is not affordable for every student. Some people have the opinion that in order to provide access to quality
education
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 for
everyone
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, universities should not charge tuition fees. I firmly agree with the said viewpoint as I believe that providing free
education
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 will bring various social and economic benefits, which will be illustrated in
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 essay.
Firstly
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, the major advantage of having free
education
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 for
everyone
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 will be that more
people particularly
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people, particularly
 those who belong to a financially challenged background will be given an opportunity to get higher
education
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. It is no secret that many students despite their ability and urge to get higher
education
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 could not get enrolled in universities due to unreasonably high tuition fees, which they are unable to afford.
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 coerces them to work in the informal sector where often they are paid low wages, which affects the quality of living. By providing free university
education
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, underprivileged and marginalized segments of society will be encouraged to pursue their higher studies. What is more, it is a well-known fact that developed countries often lay emphasis on free
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 for their citizens as
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 will help improve the economy of their countries.
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, having a majority of educated and skilled people will give rise to productivity and creativity, which will draw foreign investments.
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, more employment opportunities will be generated for individuals. Another advantage -when there will be no requirement of tuition fees to be paid- is that the factor of inequality and disparity will greatly decrease.
People regardless
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People, regardless
 of their financial status or background will have access to equal facilities in terms of
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. In conclusion, the idea of providing free university
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 to
everyone
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 is born of positive intent and could bring in its wake various benefits, which would help reduce factors
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 as disparity and provide equal learning opportunities to
everyone
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