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when designing a building, the most important factor is the intended use of the building rather than its outward appearance. to what extend do you agree or disagree?

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In the
worls
everything that exists anywhere
world
worlds
 where
appearance
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 matters the most, it becomes difficult to
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 a building based on its
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. While designing, it is important to consider the use of building rather than its exterior.
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design
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 according to its
function
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. On one hand, all famous
building
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buildings
 are known for its
appearance
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 rather than its
function
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. Architects and planners are pushed to an extent to
design
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 for the outlook and in doing so the
function
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 is compromised. These building sets as an example and changes the mindset of
client
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the client
 that the
appearance
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 is more essential than the
usage
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, Famous architect Zaha Hadid focuses on designing the form of the building
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 and
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 tries to fit in the
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 later according to the shape.
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 situation results in compromise the building's
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 to a certain extend. Her works are known for its
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 which eventually creates a view that the exterior is considered highly needed.
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, all logical thinkers agree that it is mandatory to focus on the planning of the building than its outward
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. There is
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a famous ideology
 of one of the famous architect - ' form follows
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' which means, a building should built based on its
function
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. During ancient era, people built structures for survival, as technology started they started to adapt to the changes by adding elements to their structures.
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in
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an
 earthquake prone area is utterly useless because it
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serve
 the purpose. Here the
apperance
outward or visible aspect of a person or thing
appearance
 of building will certainly cause
problem
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a problem
problems
 to the entire structure.
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 according to the
usage
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 rather looking after the
appearance
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.
This
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. In my opinion its extremely important to
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 a structure based on its
fucntion
(mathematics) a mathematical relation such that each element of a given set (the domain of the function) is associated with an element of another set (the range of the function)
function
 rather than its
appearance
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • functionality
  • user experience
  • ergonomic
  • productivity
  • safety standards
  • building codes
  • emergency exits
  • ventilation
  • accessibility features
  • sustainability
  • energy-efficient
  • flexibility
  • adaptability
  • multifunctional
  • regulations
  • operational costs
  • environmental impact
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