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Some people consider art to be essential and others think it is not. Which view do you agree with and why? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.

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Many people believe that when choosing the
course
 of study, they should focus on what kinds of careers they can get rather than based on the basis of their interests. While I agree that looking at the types of jobs is very important, I believe that we should not forget about our enjoyment. In my opinion, when we consider the kinds of occupation
for
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in
 our study major, we can get many benefits to our future career. By the time we do research on the prospective job of the
course
, we would have a clear orientation on the way we will go in the future.
Therefore
, I believe that students can acquire as much as possible the necessary
skill
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skills
 for their future career, which very useful for their own later.
Also
, if they've already had the basis of knowledge about the major as well as lots of experience during their studies, they would have higher employment opportunities.
On the other hand
, people often achieve their best results when they really enjoy the process they pass through. If the
course
 they choose is based on their interests, they will feel very satisfied and they can follow, understand it easily.
This
 seems less
important but
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important, but
 it actually affects very much on the pace of the process they pursue any career.
Therefore
, it's not only saved their
time but
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time, but
also
 create the best results.
Moreover
, when they have a great sense of achievement, they would work more effectively. In conclusion, I believe that both the factor should be considered when choosing the
course
 of study.
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