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Marriages are bigger and more expensive nowadays than in the past. Why is this the case? Is it a positive or negative development?

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In modern world wedding ceremonies became greater and more costly, and there are different reasons for it
such
 as greater expectations, drive of
attain
Suggestion
attaining
 a higher social status, and easiness of
achieveing
to gain with effort
achieving
 required circumstances. In my opinion, lager marriages
is
Suggestion
are
 an indicator of negative development considering cultural and financial results. On one hand, there are simple but strong reasons of expensive and bigger ceremonies.
Firstly
, it is true that today's people experience the technology and as a consequence they raise
greaterexpectations
Suggestion
greater expectations
.
For instance
, people use social media to follow the other's living, some of which have improved opportunities.
Hence
, individuals can observe large organizations like marriages and develop a set of criteria to meet for their own occasions.
Secondly
, most believe that a huge and costly wedding is a sign of higher social status,
bacouse
for the reason that; on account of
because
 it is assumed that they are rich and classy.
Thirdly
, compared to
past
Suggestion
the past
, it is easier to achieve the requirements of
such
 an occasion
such
 as the special places, organization companies and even cake ateliers.
On the other hand
, I certainly
aggree
be in accord; be in agreement
agree
agreed
 that big and expensive marriages are evidence of negative development.
Such
 kind of occasions leads to cultural erosion by causing the eruption of variations in society.
Also
, it has financial effects on the couples apply for loans to the banks only for the wedding ceremony expenses.
This
 is a waste of money and causes disagreements between couples. In conclusion, expectations, status and accessibility are the reasons for bigger and costly marriages, and it can be seen as a negative development since it results in cultural erosion and financial issues.
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The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

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