Due to the development and rapid expansion of supermarkets in some countries, many small, local business are unable to compete. Some people think that the closure of local business will bring about the death of local communities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The Supermarkets are the stores where consumers purchase goods for daily needs. In

this

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developing world, there is huge demand for supermarkets. A Significant amount of people think that small scale shops are getting ignored, which leads to the closure of their business due to the drop in the sale. I believe both the local business and supermarkets has to be there for a good healthy community.

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with, the predominant factor that makes people to prefer supermarkets rather than local stores is that they have a wide range of collection, where consumers can buy all the things they need at one store

instead

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of purchasing at different shops.

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, when they purchase things in

same store

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the same store

, chances of getting discount on the final product will be high.

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Additionally

super markets

a large self-service grocery store selling groceries and dairy products and household goods

supermarkets

offers

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offer

its buyers various bonus points on credit and debit cards.

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, I used to purchase daily goods at big bazaar. Each time I buy new things, a bonus points are added to my card.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

2 paragraphs

168 words

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Due to the development and rapid expansion of supermarkets in some countries, many small, local business are unable to compete. Some people think that the closure of local business will bring about the death of local communities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Include an introduction and conclusion

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Now many big cities in the world are increasing in size. What are the problems associated with it? What are the solutions to these problems?

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Traffic on roads has become a problem in nearly every country in the world. What can be done to reduce the amount of traffic at a society level and at an individual level?