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Fast food is a part of life in many place. Some people think this has bad effects in lifestyle and diet. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons.

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In a modern lifestyle, eating of
junk
food
 has risen tremendously in people especially children and adults. While it is possible to claim that it is the quick, convenient and inexpensive way to feed stomach in the busy time schedule.
On the contrary
, it is very harmful to our healthy
life
. My view is that harmful effect outweighs advantageous side. In
this
 essay, I shall explain my point of view on both sides of
arguments
Suggestion
the arguments
. There are myriad reasons why
junk
 foods are disadvantageous for people. One of them is that it has lack of nutrition so that it does not provide any required nourishment to the body.
Also
, fast foods are the major cause of so many dangerous diseases
such
 as obesity, cardiovascular and diabetes.
For instance
, around one-
third
 of the population of
United States
Suggestion
the United States
 of America is suffering from obesity disease and spending so much money on their treatments because obesity may be a reason for death
also
. Probing
further
, eating outside, generally fast
food
, can affect your family cohesiveness as eating together
on
Suggestion
with
 dining table allows parents to talk and discuss with their children in the peaceful environment. On the flip side, some people claim that
junk
food
 is the suitable and
rapid way
Suggestion
a rapid way
 to feed
stomach
Suggestion
the stomach
 in extremely busy daily
life
.
Also
, these
food
Suggestion
foods
 are cheaper than other
food
 product and easily available at everywhere any time of the day.
In addition
, there are numerous kinds of
junk
food
 available and the taste is often good. In conclusion, having
junk
food
 outside is not a good habit for healthy
life
. In my point of view, you cannot be prohibited to sell
this but
Accept comma addition
this, but
 people should aware of the negative effect of
this
 because it indirectly affects human
life
 in term of health, money and socially as well.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • prevalence
  • sedentary lifestyle
  • culinary culture
  • wholesome meals
  • inherently
  • health consequences
  • nutritional options
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