some people believe that it is important allowing children to make their own choices on everyday matter is likely to result in a society of individuals who only think about own wishes. other people believe that it is important for children to make decisions about matters that affect them. discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

How much freedom should children have on everyday matters is
controvercial
marked by or capable of arousing controversy
controversial
. People, who are
gainst
in contact with
against
giving the
boudless
seemingly boundless in amount, number, degree, or especially extent
boundless
liberty to children, believe that it will result in creating a selfish and self
centered
being or placed in the center
centred
society, while
other
plural of other; the people or things not already mentioned
others
opine that certain level of freedom is necessary to nurture the creativity in growing minds. I believe, parents should
niether
not ever; at no time in the past or future
never
give a
total
Suggestion
totally
free hand, nor they should restrain them
on
Suggestion
at
every step. On the one hand, allowing children to do whatever they
want to and letting
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want and letting
them chose anything they like, creates a sense of arrogance and self
centerdness
which is
deterimental
(sometimes followed by 'to') causing harm or injury
detrimental
to their growth and mental development.
For instance
, the
psycholofical
mental or emotional as opposed to physical in nature
psychological
researches have revealed that, the childhood events and experiences have a lasting effect on shaping anyone's personality and mental approach.
That is
why parents should make important decisions for children, those are beneficial for their future.
On the contrary
, researches have expressed that, restraining a
child
from making simple decisions in the daily life, creates a sense of
depreviation
a state of extreme poverty
deprivation
depreciation
deprivations
and
such
children lack confidence. That means if a
child
knows, his liking or
dissliking
have or feel a dislike or distaste for
disliking
will not
making
Suggestion
make
any difference in taking a final decision, it will put an end on his
,
Accept space
,
eventually
,
Accept space
,
thought process and it may shape him to be a good follower, but
definitly
without question and beyond doubt
definitely
, not a good leader.
For instance
, when
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
was a
child
,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
was not even bothered to be asked, whether
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
like or not what is being brought or bought for me, while
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
could see other pupils doing
thing
Suggestion
things
a thing
of their own choice, it made me frustrated and my school grades were decreased greatly. In conclusion, offering a
child
freedom to make simple decisions on day to day bases, will polish his thinking, encourage better ideas and rationalise his choices which are key qualities of a successful man.

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