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The chart shows components of GDP in the UK from 1992 to 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart shows components of GDP in the UK from 1992 to 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart illustrates
that
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 gross domestic product generated
from
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the
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IT and
Service
 Industry in the UK from 1992 to 2000.
Overall
, it can be seen
the
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that
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 IT increase its percentage of GDP sharply over the years,
while
 the
service
 went up steadily. As for
IT
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the IT
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 industry,
the
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IT started
with
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at
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just over 6
percent
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per cent
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 which was similar to the percentage of the
Service
 at 4%.
Then
 it slightly grew
up
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 about 2 at
near
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 8 % for four years.
However
, it dramatically increased its percentage as twice
at
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near
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 14% from 1996 to 2000. When it comes to
Service
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the Service
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 industry, It grew up quite significantly at just over 6% in 1994.
Nevertheless
, it didn’t show any sharp increase between 1994 and 2000, though it slightly grew up to about 2% at 8%
at the end
 of the period.
To sum up
,
while
 there were times that the percentages of both teams were really close between 1994 and 1996. IT and
Service
 ended up having completely different percentages of GDP at just over 14% and at about 8% respectively.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words service with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just over" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • components
  • GDP
  • consumption
  • investment
  • government spending
  • net exports
  • display
  • categories
  • largest
  • increase
  • stable
  • range
  • decline
  • fluctuate
  • gradual
  • positive values
  • negative values
  • overall
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