With an increasing overweight population some people think universities should make sport a compulsory module on all degree courses. To what extent do you agree?

Many believe that college's should make physical activities a mandatory part of the curriculum,
this
is because, obesity is becoming a growing problem. I agree with
this
notion to some extent.
This
essay will discuss how university
faciliates excersice
Accept comma addition
facilities, exercise
faciliates exercise
facilities exercise
facilities excersice
facilitates excersice
, and how some majors are too busy to incorporate subjects
such
as sports. The dilemma of obesity can be tackled through university.
This
is where students spend 60% of their day.
Therefore
, a fraction of
this
time
should be spent on sports.
In addition
to
this
, in order to reach the maximum capacity of learning, one must have a sound mental state, which comes through
excercise
the activity of exerting your muscles in various ways to keep fit
exercise
.
Furthermore
,
considering students are
Suggestion
students are considering
paying for these sports facilities as part of their education fees, they should use them.
For example
, in The University Of Argentina, in 2018, its attendee's
where
have the quality of being; (copula, used with an adjective or a predicate noun)
were
forced to take a class in football one hour per day. They were weighed before and after
this
system was put into place.
Consequently
, 70% of the team had lost 40% of their initial body weight. Overall, targeting college's for weight loss schemes has proven to be very effective.
However
, there are numerous reasons why integrating sports in Universities should not be an absolute imperative.
Firstly
, some people are immobile and handicapped, for
this
reason they cannot participate, it would be pointless to make them join in.
Secondly
, another collection of students
are
Suggestion
is
on scholarship in faculties
such
as Medicine, it would be reckless and unfair to force them to take
time
out of their studies.
Thus
, they do not have the
time
or energy.
For instance
, I am a practicing doctor in medical school, I do not have much
time
to do anything as my studies are very demanding and
time
consuming, being forced to do sports throughout my day would be
draining
Suggestion
drained
and
unneccessary
not necessary
unnecessary
. Undoubtedly, there are scenario's where one can simply not take part. In conclusion, while it is understandable that people would want to tackle the issue of obesity through essential sports classes because of its many benefits, it is not attainable nor realistic.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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