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Many things that used to be done in the home by hands are now being done by machines. Does this development bring more advantages or disadvantages?

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Technology
is flourishing
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has been flourishing
 by leaps and bounds and providing us new avenues for accomplishing our tasks with effectiveness. Several household chores which used to be manually executed are now automated. In my opinion, I believe that
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 advancement has more benefits in comparison to drawbacks, and in
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 essay, I will support my view with examples. Admittedly, domestic appliances have made us slaves to technology. Many people are now completely dependent on them and rarely push themselves to perform any manual homework, eventually leading them to be more lethargic at home. To illustrate
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 with the help of equipments
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 as washing machines,
dish washers
a machine for washing dishes
dishwashers
 and vacuum cleaners people are able to complete their household tasks in no
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 and with not much physical involvement. If these machines were not invented, people would have been forced to execute all their tasks manually, which would help them to be healthier and fitter.
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, despite the above disadvantage, I believe that these machines offer a plethora of advantages. These appliances have proven to be a blessing for people,
specially
to a distinctly greater extent or degree than is common
especially
 women. Earlier women used to spend
significant amount
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a significant amount
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 in household activities, leaving them with no leisure
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, with the advent of these technological devices, they are able to spare a lot of
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, which they now utilize in pursuing their career, and in taking care of their kids.
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, in a survey conducted by “Asia White Goods Association ”, it was reported that there is an increase of 42% of women returning back to work owing to the usage of these domestic appliances.
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,
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 innovation has helped to improve their living standards. To conclude,
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 these appliances have made people inert at home
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 I believe they are now able to make use of
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time
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 in looking after their families and in seeking better opportunities in the job world.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Automation
  • Efficiency
  • Manual labor
  • Displacement
  • Homemaking skills
  • Technological advancements
  • Self-sufficiency
  • Resource depletion
  • Energy efficiency
  • Social dynamics
  • Operational understanding
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