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In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this case? What can be done about this problem?

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Undoubtedly
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the usage of modernized machine revolutionized the agriculture industry
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but still partially unsuccessful in producing adequate amount of
food
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However
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such
 intimidating obstacle could be overcome by the effective farm management policies.
To begin
 with, increasing population ceases economic growth and infrastructure development.
Moreover
, shortage of
food
 causes due to rise in population
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sudden enlargement in population rate
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in addition
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 unsatisfactory policies by a country administrations
intensify
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intensifies
food
 drought.
Although
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many
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much
 sophisticated equipment
are introduced
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is introduced
 that fasten the process of ploughing, harvesting and threshing, but these phenomenal technologies are unapproachable by
small cultivator
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the small cultivator
 because of
high price
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the high price
high prices
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Therefore
, they presume that practicing of ordinary methods is suitable for them.
For example
, In south Asian territories many farmer grown up crops for family need not for commercial purpose.
On the other hand
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mandatory support from local government could be essential in controlling
food
 deficiency.
Firstly
, state administration assured that local banks provide loans on easy
installments
a payment of part of a debt; usually paid at regular intervals
instalments
 to farmers that could enable them to buy agriculture supporting technology
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Secondly
, accurate weather forecast and informative agricultural training make agriculturalist accustom with the methods to improve the crop yield.
For example
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Last
 year in East Asia incorrect weather forecast affect Karif crops badly. To Sum up
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food
 scarcity is troublesome and causes still exist which are hurting people
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however
, the suitable government contribution is ample to fix
this
 obnoxious problem.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • inequality
  • distribution
  • access to resources
  • climate change
  • natural disasters
  • political factors
  • economic factors
  • agricultural practices
  • infrastructure
  • transportation
  • population growth
  • education
  • knowledge
  • food waste
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