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Some people say it is important to keep your home and your wokplace tidy, with everything organised and in the correct place. What is your opinion about this?

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Certain individuals believe keeping the
house
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 and office space clean and items well-arranged is crucial. I agree with
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 statement because having a neat
house
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 and a sparkling workstation has a wide range of benefits. The look of the
house
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 and the office space tells a lot about an individual. If I were to hire a Personal Assistant
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, I will not bother asking the candidate to tell me about his/her organizational skill level. I would rather ask to visit the potential staff for an informal interview at the person’s
house
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.
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 is where I will make my deductions and conclusion in determining whether the person is the perfect fit for the job or not. When items are neatly arranged, cleaning them becomes
very easy task
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a very easy task
. It becomes
fast
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faster
 to spot straying insects and pests and treat them appropriately.
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 there will be less
outbreak
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outbreaks
 of illnesses and diseases, because most disease outbreaks are caused by rodents (who serve as carriers). Once
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 is done, we will have a healthy place to live. Having a sparkling environment is
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 a way to teach children
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about
 the relevance of good hygiene. Children learn mostly from experience and by watching the adults around them. They learn how to arrange
there
of them or themselves
their
 toys from seeing how it is done by the older ones around them.
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, having everywhere around us spotless and sparkling shows that we are in total control of everything around us irrespective of the pressure from outside. It gives an impression of a highly professional individual in the office and confident person all round.
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