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Many supermarkets are selling more and more products that are imported from other countries instead of selling food that is locally sourced. What are the reasons for this? Is this a positive or negative development?

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Many supermarkets nowadays are selling more imported
products
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instead
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 of domestic
products
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. The
reasons
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 for
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 tendency will be mentioned in
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 essay and I believe that
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 is a negative development. There are various
reasons
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 why many supermarkets are selling more imported
products
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 from other nations.
Firstly
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, imported
products
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 may have a higher quality compared with goods that are locally sourced.
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, some processed food produced in other countries may have a higher quality
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 their advanced technology in manufacturing.
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, some renowned
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such
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 as Coca-Cola or Pepsi would be easier to buy since it is cheaper
as well as
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 their reputation.
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, buying imported
products
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 may increase their profit in general.
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,
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 development could be negative for many
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.
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, local businesses would have fewer consumers which affects negatively their income and ability to reinvest in production,
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 of the financial problems of small domestic businesses.
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, the nation's economy would be more dependent on other countries since they accounted for a large segment of selling
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.
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 could impact an individual's patriotism since they use more and more imported
products
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 that may be easier to be affected by other cultures.
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, the young generation in Vietnam preferred to buy Coca-Cola
instead
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 of Xa xi (a local soft drink in Vietnam) since they believed that it could be better in quality. In conclusion, there are several mentioned
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 why many supermarkets have
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 tendency,
however
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, it is undeniable that selling more and more
products
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 that are imported from other countries would be a negative development
due to
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 several mentioned clues.
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