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Some say you should always marry for love; others say that in an uncertain world it is wiser to marry for money. Discuss both points of view and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays,
money
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 is one of the most significant materials in our lives.
To
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For
 many people, it is appropriate to marry for
money
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 rather than
love
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.
However
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, I believe that both
love
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 and
money
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 should be combined in any
marriage
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. Certainly,
money
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 plays an important part in our lives. It is hard for any persons to accept a partner who does not have
money
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 or at least a job to take care of their future family.
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, it is said, “marry for
money
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” is right in some extent.
However
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,
love
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 should be the root of any
marriage
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.
Firstly
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, it is because
love
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 is
such
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 a strong bond between two persons who have their own lives, and become one. So, they can share each other’s sadness, happiness to overcome any difficulties in their daily lives.
Moreover
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,
love
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 makes people grow up because they do not only have
responsibility
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a responsibility
 to themselves, but
also
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 to their partners as well.
That is
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 why marrying for
love
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 is always encouraged. In my opinion, I think that
love
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 and
money
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 are both necessary. A
marriage
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 relying on
money
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 would rapidly disintegrate when unfortunately the
money
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 ran out. In contrary, a
marriage
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 relying on
love
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 would sometimes come to end when they could not earn
money
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 to carry out family duties
such
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 as paying bills, buying food, etc.
Therefore
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,
love
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 and
money
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 should stand together in
marriage
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 even though their contribution could be unbalanced. As we have seen,
marriage
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 without either
money
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 or
love
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 would come to an unhappy end. So I believe that they both make their own contribution to a merry family.
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