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University students are increasingly studying abroad as part of their studies. Do the advantages of studying abroad outweigh the disadvantages?

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As the number of University students who go overseas to
study
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 is increasing, people are debating about the advantages and disadvantages of studying abroad. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?
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 essay shows that
although
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 pursuing education in another
country
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 is costly and often distracting to students, it is far more beneficial to them due to the new learning and personality development opportunities offered by overseas
study
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. Getting educated abroad is helpful in developing personal skills in students. Because students studying in foreign countries are faced with
challenges
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the challenges
 of coping with
new culture
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a new culture
, norms, and standards, they develop a balanced personality during the process of overcoming these challenges.
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, students learn new ways of living life as they interact with different people who have their own ways of leading their lives.
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, in a recent
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, overseas
study
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 has proven to produce well-balanced graduates from among students in another
country
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.
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, foreign
study
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 is criticised by many because it is often costly. To pursue education in another
country
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, students have to buy plane tickets as well as their own accommodation whereas they can live with their parents in their home
country
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 during studies.
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, going to another
country
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 takes the focus away from studies as they get busy sorting out their day-today matters. If they pursue education in
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 own
country
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, these issues would not be present. In conclusion, even though studying in another
country
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 is costly and causes focus issues for students, it creates a balanced personality among graduates and offers them new ways of learning about life.
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 why, I believe, the advantages of overseas
study
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 win over the disadvantages.
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