Some people think the government is responsible for the rise in obesity in children, while others think it is the fault of the parents. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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The rise

in obesity is a chronic problem plaguing people of all ages

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today, but

the worst affected are the children.

Unthinkable it

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Unthinkable, it

may be, but it’s a reality that children under 10 are experiencing

same levels

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the same levels

of obesity as that of the people above 35 as per “National Health Census Bureau”. Leading theories for

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issue blame two main parties, the government and the parents. In my opinion, both contribute significantly for

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pediatric

of or relating to the medical care of children

paediatric

overweight. On the one hand, some believe governments

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lackadaisical in their approach towards

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growing menace in the

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place. It is said that they were irresponsible in the publicity of

nutritional value

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the nutritional value

of

food

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and its impact on the health of the children. Public health department delayed the “Labelling of packed foods” bill by a decade due to the lobbying of vested interests.

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led to the higher consumption of salt and sugars, which are major culprits for weight gain, they believe.

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, some opine that the parents failed their kids. Due to social pressures, children were taken to fancy fast

food

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restaurants from an early age, creating an addiction for high-calorie foods. It is widely believed that,

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, coupled with

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the lack

a lack

of spending

control led

restrained or managed or kept within certain bounds

controlled

to high consumption of fatty foods by the kids. While

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is a major concern, a bigger concern is the example elders are setting. Pupils imitate the elders in all aspects. If grown ups in the home are consuming cholesterol filled foods as a habit, children would see no harm in eating them.

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, in my opinion, both factors are justly blamed. Governments are responsible for inspections of

food

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quality & measures and the job is not done properly. While they conduct raids regularly, an anti-tobacco level campaign is required to battle

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curse.

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, parents are

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responsbile

worthy of or requiring responsibility or trust; or held accountable

responsible

for their habit of splurging on junk

food

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which should subside significantly for

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condition to vanish.