Some people say that physical education should be required part of every school day. Other believe the whole day on academic studies. Which view do you agree with use specific reasons and details to show your answer.

Few individuals considered sports a vital element of student life and argue that it should be made a compulsory part of schooling.
However
, many
other contradict
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other, contradict
stating that full day at
school
has to be focused
on acadamics only
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only on academics
on academics only
on academic only
. Favour of former view and my inclination will be justified in ensuring paragraph.
To begin
with, physical education in
school
curriculum health promoting mental and physical well being of educates. As overall development is what should be the major concern of
school
life. Does amalgamation of sports related activity with studies, not only help developing mental strength of students
,
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,
but
also
enhances their physical well being.
Also if
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Also, if
school
going children are made to learn sports to which they are inclined at
aage
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Aage
age
,
then
owing to faster learning capabilities of young age they will master that game.
This
will open new doors of career path for them.
This
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Thus
, students who lack interest in studies are actually going to be benefited as they dear future career in swimming cycling
,
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,
gymnastics
etecetra
.
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.
Moreover statistics
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is
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are
that physical
exercise yoga
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exercise, yoga
enhances the concentration power of doers. It is not only attentiveness
,
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,
but
also
disease resistance with yoga is believed to improve.
In addition
to
this
sports
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sport
are widely accepted for promoting Team Spirit and competitiveness.
Hence
, it students are in
dost
county in the southwest of England
Dorset
into sports and other physical exercises important quotes of being competitive, focused our team will get boosted.
This
will help them immensely in later stages of life. In
conclusion keeping
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conclusion, keeping
in mind the development of student as a whole
,
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,
it is very important to include any form of physical activity in each
school
day because
this
will improve psychological health, gives new direction to
students
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students'
student's
career and improve the essential traits which will be helpful for them as adults in
future
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the future
.
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