Some people say that physical education should be required part of every school day. Other believe the whole day on academic studies. Which view do you agree with use specific reasons and details to show your answer.

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Few individuals considered sports a vital element of student life and argue that it should be made a compulsory part of schooling.

However

, many

other contradict

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other, contradict

stating that full day at

school

has to be focused

on acadamics only

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only on academics

on academics only

on academic only

. Favour of former view and my inclination will be justified in ensuring paragraph.

To begin

with, physical education in

school

curriculum health promoting mental and physical well being of educates. As overall development is what should be the major concern of

school

life. Does amalgamation of sports related activity with studies, not only help developing mental strength of students

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but

also

enhances their physical well being.

Also if

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Also, if

school

going children are made to learn sports to which they are inclined at

aage

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Aage

age

then

owing to faster learning capabilities of young age they will master that game.

This

will open new doors of career path for them.

This

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Thus

, students who lack interest in studies are actually going to be benefited as they dear future career in swimming cycling

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gymnastics

etecetra

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Moreover statistics

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are

that physical

exercise yoga

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exercise, yoga

enhances the concentration power of doers. It is not only attentiveness

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but

also

disease resistance with yoga is believed to improve.

In addition

this

sports

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sport

are widely accepted for promoting Team Spirit and competitiveness.

Hence

, it students are in

dost

county in the southwest of England

Dorset

into sports and other physical exercises important quotes of being competitive, focused our team will get boosted.

This

will help them immensely in later stages of life. In

conclusion keeping

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conclusion, keeping

in mind the development of student as a whole

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it is very important to include any form of physical activity in each

school

day because

this

will improve psychological health, gives new direction to

students

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students'

student's

career and improve the essential traits which will be helpful for them as adults in

future

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the future

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