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Some people believe that children should not be given homework everyday while others believe that they must get homework everyday in order to be successful at school Discuss both sides and give your opinion

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It is argued regarding assignments, where one half
believe
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believes
 that daily assignments actually enhance their academics as well as life, whereas, the other half is totally against it.
This
 essay discusses both the views before reaching the final verdict.
firstly
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Firstly
, let us Consider the merits of
daily homework
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the daily homework
.
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.
regular
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Regular
 assignments will improve their knowledge because at least to complete
it they
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it, they
 open their books and recall their lectures
this
 will, in turn, enhance their memory which eventually shows a positive impact on their academics. To illustrate, research has proved that students who are engaging themselves in their daily assignments are able to score higher marks than the people who are least concerned about their assignments.
On the other hand
, few people believe that
this
 concept of
homework which
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homework, which
 is given on
daily basis
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a daily basis
 will not be helpful for a student to achieve in their academic since they are pressurized to complete their work
.
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.
therefore
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Therefore, as
Therefore as
as a result
, there are chances where students start to hate school as well as the studies which, automatically affects their education.
to
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To
 cite an example a recent survey
on
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of
 schools has revealed that 80% of toppers
are from education institutes
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have from education instituted
are from education institutes
 where they follow a concept of periodic assignments which is given only once in a week. To conclude, regular brushing of lessons in the form of assignment is the ideal method to enhance their dedication towards studies and
in addition
, it helps to excel in their life as well as academics. These after-school works are undoubtedly helpful for pupils, even though children hate it.
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