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Most employers nowadays put increasing emphasis on social skills. Some people believe that social skills are important in adddition to good qualification for job success. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Social
skills
 are being increasingly emphasised,
while
 it is argued that they are only additional requirements to succeed in the workplace. I partially agree with
this
 statement as
people
 are recommended to put more attention towards social
skills
,
although
 these
skills
 are an extra option in the qualification of
job
. Socializing
skills
 are important
in addition
 to good qualifications for
job
 success. Because, these
skills
 are required almost in all fields of a
job
,
as well as
 it is difficult to get successful in a
job
 or its
job
 unless applicants do not have socializing
skills
.
For example
, If
people
 want to get jobs in restaurants, they are suggested to be social, at least they should be able to communicate with clients.
For
this
 reason, socializing
skills
 are needed as an extra requirement when
people
 want to get a
job
.
However
,
people
,
such
 as employers put increasing emphasis on social
skills
 since most jobs require cooperation work where employees can not deal with their work without being social.
For instance
, If applicants do not have social or communication
skills
, they are not being hired for several jobs,
such
 as teachers and doctors.
Hence
, more and more companies require their employees or applicants to be social. In conclusion, the requirement for social
skills
 is increasing dramatically,
whereas
 these
skills
 are still additional to good qualifications for
job
 success. I believe that both employers and employees should emphasise social
skills
 with more effort.
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task achievement
Explain and elaborate more on your key points. For example, when discussing the importance of social skills in restaurant jobs, provide a more detailed explanation to strengthen your point.
coherence cohesion
Work on sentence structure and grammar. There are some minor errors that affect the flow of your essay.
task achievement
Try to use a wider range of vocabulary to make your essay more engaging and demonstrate your language proficiency.
coherence cohesion
The introduction and conclusion are present and clearly outline your position.
task achievement
You have managed to present some relevant examples to support your points, which is good for demonstrating your understanding of the topic.
coherence cohesion
You have maintained a coherent structure, with each paragraph focusing on a particular point.

Word Count

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Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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