You have recently changed your job and started working for a new company. Write a letter to an English-speaking friend. In your letter: • explain why you changed your previous job • describe your new job • tell him/her your other news

Dear John, I am fine here and hope that you are

also

sailing in the same boat. I am writing

this

letter to share with you the exciting news of joining a new job. As you know, I was looking for a new job in New York City,

therefore

, when I got the job offer, I immediately accepted it. Albeit I liked my previous line of work,

however

, I was stuck

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the same position

since

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last

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two years and wanted to do something else to enhance my skills. Working as a software engineer, my new employment is really exhilarating as the work environment and the new colleagues are amazing.

Moreover

, I have already made three new friends who live nearby my new house.

Besides

this

, I am eagerly waiting to show you my new apartment that I have bought recently. Apart from being near my office, it is sufficiently spacious for my family too. I am confident that you will

also

like it. I hope that you will visit my new place soon. Looking forward to hearing from you soon. Yours Lovingly, Amanjot Singh.

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You have recently changed your job and started working for a new company. Write a letter to an English-speaking friend. In your letter: • explain why you changed your previous job • describe your new job • tell him/her your other news

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Many people believe that social networking sites (such as Facebook) have had a huge negative impact on both individuals and society. To what extent do you agree?

More and more students are choosing to study at college and universities in foreign countries. Do the advantages of studying abroad outweigh the drawbacks?

Many efforts have been made by countries to address challenges concerning the environment but the situation has not improved. What are the possible reasons for environmental degradation? Are there any solutions to combat this problem? Support your answer with specific reasons and examples.

Most people prefer shopping in supermarkets nowadays. How does this affect the local shops? What are the positive and negative impacts of this development?

Some believe that people should not continue to work once they reach the age of retirement. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answers and include relevant examples from your experience.