More children in developed countries are becoming overweight. This is serious problem for wealthy countries. Discuss some causes and effects of these problems

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Serious issue facing by developed countries is obesity and overweight in

majority

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the majority

of children.

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essay will discuss about

causes

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the causes

of overweight due to junk foods and sedentary

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life style

a manner of living that reflects the person's values and attitudes

lifestyle

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essay will

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discuss the effects of these problems in

life

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and health.

Current generation

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The current generation

is addicted to sedentary

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life style

a manner of living that reflects the person's values and attitudes

lifestyle

by spending their span on front of mobile phone and computer screen.

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, they avoid physical activities like playing outdoor games or doing exercises. Due to lack of

movement calories

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movement, calories

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body

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does not burn and cause overweight.

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instance my

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instance, my

cousin is 14 years old and carrying a weight of 50

kilograms which

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kilograms, which

is more as compare to age and

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is only because of

sedentary

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a sedentary lifestyle

sedentary lifestyle

sedentary lifestyles

life

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style. Popularity of junk food consumption is

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one of the causes of extra calories and fat in children’s

body

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food contains saturated fats and extra sugar which

give

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gives

rise to

fleshy

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a fleshy body

the fleshy body

body

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youngster

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a youngster

youngsters

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effect in

long term

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the long term

. Obesity affects the

body

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and

life

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in negative ways.

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increase in calories and saturated fats in

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body

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the body

give rise to many health issues like heart attack, increase or decrease in bold pressure, high cholesterol, high blood sugar and many more. These problems decrease the working efficiency of daily

life

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and

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diminish the

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life span

the period during which something is functional (as between birth and death)

lifespan

of children. In conclusion, in today’s fast

life

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every child is totally addicted to junk food and avoids physical activities which give rise to obesity. Government should consider

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issue seriously and take some action to control suck problem.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Task Achievement: 5.0

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258 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

obesity
sedentary
caloric intake
processed foods
fast food culture
screen time
metabolic disorders
healthcare expenditure
lifestyle diseases
preventative strategies
nutritional education
public health policy
body mass index (BMI)
emotional well-being
stigmatization
exercise regimen
eating habits
junk food
socioeconomic factors
health literacy

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