More children in developed countries are becoming overweight. This is serious problem for wealthy countries. Discuss some causes and effects of these problems

Serious issue facing by developed countries is obesity and overweight in
majority
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the majority
of children.
This
essay will discuss about
causes
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the causes
of overweight due to junk foods and sedentary
life style
a manner of living that reflects the person's values and attitudes
lifestyle
.
This
essay will
also
discuss the effects of these problems in
life
and health.
Current generation
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The current generation
is addicted to sedentary
life style
a manner of living that reflects the person's values and attitudes
lifestyle
by spending their span on front of mobile phone and computer screen.
Moreover
, they avoid physical activities like playing outdoor games or doing exercises. Due to lack of
movement calories
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movement, calories
on
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in
body
does not burn and cause overweight.
For
instance my
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instance, my
cousin is 14 years old and carrying a weight of 50
kilograms which
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kilograms, which
is more as compare to age and
this
is only because of
sedentary
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a sedentary lifestyle
sedentary lifestyle
sedentary lifestyles
life
style. Popularity of junk food consumption is
also
one of the causes of extra calories and fat in children’s
body
.
Such
food contains saturated fats and extra sugar which
give
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gives
rise to
fleshy
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a fleshy body
the fleshy body
body
of
youngster
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a youngster
youngsters
and it
also
effect in
long term
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the long term
. Obesity affects the
body
and
life
in negative ways.
Such
increase in calories and saturated fats in
body
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the body
give rise to many health issues like heart attack, increase or decrease in bold pressure, high cholesterol, high blood sugar and many more. These problems decrease the working efficiency of daily
life
and
also
diminish the
life span
the period during which something is functional (as between birth and death)
lifespan
of children. In conclusion, in today’s fast
life
every child is totally addicted to junk food and avoids physical activities which give rise to obesity. Government should consider
this
issue seriously and take some action to control suck problem.

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