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Plastic shopping bags contribute to the pollution of land and sea.Some people think they should be banned.Do you agree or disagree. Give examples for your answers.

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Environmental nuisance to soil and water have been on the increase over the
last
 two decades
as a result
 of the increased usage of polythene
sacs
a bag made of paper or plastic for holding customer's purchases
sacks
 for shopping. Despite the advantage of its light weight
,
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I strongly agree it should be made
illegal so
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illegal, so
 as to create a
clean
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cleaner
 environment and encourage the use of better alternatives. Opponents of
such
 a ban are of the opinion that they are
more lighter
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lighter
 in mass.People find it convenient using them because they are easier to carry and
thus
 cause less burden.
For example
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a single polyvinyl chloride bag is known to weigh 50mg while paper bags are known to weigh much more.
However
,
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,
banning them would be more beneficial.One advantage of
such
 a ban is that it would create a better surrounding.These
bags plastic
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bags, plastic
 bags are known to litter the environment and in turn cause clogging of drainage pipes and proliferation of flies.
For instance
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a recent research showed that 80% of blocked drains are caused by them.
Also
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if they were stopped from being used
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they would encourage the use of better options.Supplementary items like paper bags are
more environmental
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more environmentally
 friendly and cheaper.A case in point was a study which found out that they are less likely to cause land and water contamination. In conclusion
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despite the fact that plastic bags are known to be of lighter weights
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I strongly support
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its
 use be stopped as it would create healthier surrounding and
also
 make way for
cleaner option
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a cleaner option
 like
paper bag
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a paper bag
paper bags
.
This
 would benefit the individual and
community
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the community
 in the long
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