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Every country has poor people and every country has different ways of dealing with the poor. What are some of the reasons for world poverty? How can the poor be helped? Give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Nowadays,
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poverty
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 is one of the world's major
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concerns
 as an increasing amount of people are becoming very poor. Each country attempts to deal with
poverty
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 throughout various types of actions. In
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 essay, I shall explain the causes behind the global problem of
poverty
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.
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, I shall give a few examples of ways governments can help poor people.
Poverty
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 has been around for many centuries.
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 former generations consider it with very little attention, researchers and governments are now trying to understand the mechanism behind
poverty
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. A significant amount of intellectuals agrees on the fact that
poverty
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 is mainly due to human wars.
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, the war in Iraq destroyed the houses of many inhabitants,
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 leaving them without any form of wealth.
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, many
iraqian
a family of North American Indian languages spoken by the Iroquois
Iroquoian
 today live with less than a dollar a day
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 We must note that
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 was not the case 10 years ago. When it comes to helping the poor, governments often have a wide range of possibilities. During
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 year, there has been a substantial number of 'yellow jacket' strikes in Paris.
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 movement mainly protested against the rise of taxes on fuel for cars.
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Indeed, most
 of the strikers lived under minimum wages and argued they couldn't afford to pay more taxes
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 they would not be able to live decently. The government became aware of these problems.
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, on the 26 of April 2019, the acting french president Emmanuel Macron decided to increase by 5 billion the amount of money given to social aids. In conclusion,
poverty
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 is an important problem which has persisted over the
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 centuries and, even though governments are not capable of
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poverty
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 entirely, they try to
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limit
 the effect of
poverty
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 on the life of the people.
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, in Sweden, rich people are highly taxed in order to redistribute wealth amongst the poor.

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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • income inequality
  • economic policies
  • poverty cycle
  • job opportunities
  • government intervention
  • small businesses
  • corruption
  • poverty alleviation
  • conflict and instability
  • international aid
  • peacekeeping efforts
  • healthcare access
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