Governments give lots of support to artists, even though some people think it is a waste of money that could have been spent better elsewhere. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Governments of many states are supporting artists financially, but some individuals consider that it is wrong and there are many other areas to invest money in
more productive
Suggestion
a more productive way
way
.
This
essay agrees with the
second
opinion because the
art
cannot improve people’s life better in
material
Suggestion
a material way
material ways
way
. Supporting artists by financing their creativity is the
way
to bring the
art
into the masses.
This
support could make the entire
art
more popular in the society and could increase the number of artists overall.
For example
,
state
Suggestion
the state
states
could give aid to the beginner painter with renting gallery to expose his paintings and make them popular and in
this
way
this
artist could become famous. But
this
measures
Suggestion
measure
are not giving
Suggestion
is not giving
any significant values
for
Suggestion
of
in
the society and, to be honest, are really
waste
Suggestion
a waste
of money.
On the other hand
, there are many other institutions which continuously need investments and financing of them is
vital
Suggestion
more vital
rather than the
art
. One of
such
areas is the
healthcare
Suggestion
health care
, because the level of its development takes effect on people’s life quality immediately. There are big costs for the medical insurances in many states and giving financial support to
this
area could decrease final costs of medicine for the people. Based on said above, supporting social services
are
Suggestion
is
more useful than supporting
arts
Suggestion
the arts
. In conclusion, there is a huge governmental support for the
art
and artists, but who really need more comprehensive government’s assistance are the social services and the
first
of them is
healthcare
Suggestion
health care
because it makes people live better and longer.

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    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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