In some area of the US, a ‘curfew’ is imposed, in which teenagers are not allowed to be out of doors after a particular time at night unless they are accompanied by an adult. What is your opinion on this?

Does
curfew
will prevent young people from becoming either perpetrators or victims of nighttime crime? In recent times,
curfew
has been imposed in some states of the US,
this
means that under no circumstances are teenagers allowed to be in the streets after a certain hour at night, there is no doubt in my mind that imposing time limits have positive consequences but
also
exist some negative points that are mentioned below.
Firstly
,
although
imposing
curfew
has their positive consequences
such
as preventing teenagers from being robbed, kidnapped or getting drugs and so forth in easy way.
However
, there is no guarantee that all these risks could be avoided and it should not be forgotten that a large number of crimes are committed during the day, young people can get drugs at school easily and kidnappers do not hesitate when they have an opportunity whatever hour.
For instance
, in past years there have sadly been some gun shots at schools and these attacks were during morning hours.Unfortunately, these incidents cannot be prevented
with
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with a curfew
curfew
.
Secondly
, if in all cities time limit were imposed to teenagers, they would
started
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start
to live with
fear regardless
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fear, regardless
if their city was secure or not.
For example
, a recent survey indicates that the a large number of teenagers that live in a city where
curfew
has been imposed they feel more insecure than before due to the fact that they feel like if they were living a movie story where no one can leave their houses after 10:00pm because there some
extrange
creatures will be looking for people so as to eat them.
In addition
, they tend to believe that protection is
needed
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needed, hence
hence
, a gun is needed for fighting against those creatures. To sum up, on balance I tend to believe that cities where a time limit is imposed, teenagers could no get drugs or could be robbed easily but, in someway they start to live with more fear and imaging things that inevitably are watched on TV or videogames
thus
, more guns are demanded and violence will increase sooner or later
Submitted by Serhio Baraniuk on

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