In some area of the US, a ‘curfew’ is imposed, in which teenagers are not allowed to be out of doors after a particular time at night unless they are accompanied by an adult. What is your opinion on this?

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Does

curfew

will prevent young people from becoming either perpetrators or victims of nighttime crime? In recent times,

curfew

has been imposed in some states of the US,

this

means that under no circumstances are teenagers allowed to be in the streets after a certain hour at night, there is no doubt in my mind that imposing time limits have positive consequences but

also

exist some negative points that are mentioned below.

Firstly

although

imposing

curfew

has their positive consequences

such

as preventing teenagers from being robbed, kidnapped or getting drugs and so forth in easy way.

However

, there is no guarantee that all these risks could be avoided and it should not be forgotten that a large number of crimes are committed during the day, young people can get drugs at school easily and kidnappers do not hesitate when they have an opportunity whatever hour.

For instance

, in past years there have sadly been some gun shots at schools and these attacks were during morning hours.Unfortunately, these incidents cannot be prevented

with

Suggestion

with a curfew

curfew

Secondly

, if in all cities time limit were imposed to teenagers, they would

started

Suggestion

start

to live with

fear regardless

Suggestion

fear, regardless

if their city was secure or not.

For example

, a recent survey indicates that the a large number of teenagers that live in a city where

curfew

has been imposed they feel more insecure than before due to the fact that they feel like if they were living a movie story where no one can leave their houses after 10:00pm because there some

extrange

creatures will be looking for people so as to eat them.

In addition

, they tend to believe that protection is

needed

Accept comma addition

needed, hence

hence

, a gun is needed for fighting against those creatures. To sum up, on balance I tend to believe that cities where a time limit is imposed, teenagers could no get drugs or could be robbed easily but, in someway they start to live with more fear and imaging things that inevitably are watched on TV or videogames

thus

, more guns are demanded and violence will increase sooner or later

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