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A friend from abroad is visiting your country next month. She is planning to stay with you, but you can't accomodate her. Write a letter to her - tell her the reasons - Apologise - Make alternative arrangements

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Dear Sarah, How's it going? It's great to hear from you. It's been a long time since we
last
 saw each other and the news of your coming to India has made me excited. I've already started planning about the places we are going to visit together. I'm gonna take you to Qutub Minar, Taj Mahal, Red Fort and many other beautiful places in my city. We can
also
 have lunch together someday. There is one problem though. I know you're planning to stay with me but unfortunately, I won't be able to keep you at my place. As I told you before, my sister's gonna get married next month. So, we will have to
accomodate
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accommodate
 a lot of guests that are coming from out of town and my small house is gonna be beyond its capacity. I am so sorry about it. I know you are coming all the way from London to meet us, that's why I feel so bad that you won't be able to stay with us. But, not to worry because I've already made arrangements for you to stay with my
cousin
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 sister Charu who lives in South Delhi. She is very hospitable and will take great care of you.
Alright
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, I will see you at the Airport
then
. Yours Lovingly, Lovish
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logical structure
Consider breaking the second paragraph into two separate paragraphs for even greater clarity.
suitable writing tone
Make sure to proofread for small typos like 'gonna' which may not be suitable for formal writing.
complete response
The letter provides a clear reason why she cannot accommodate her friend and offers a suitable alternative arrangement.
suitable writing tone
The writing tone is very friendly and appropriate for a letter to a friend.
single idea per paragraph
The ideas are well-organized into paragraphs, each focusing on a specific point.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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