Very few school children learn about the value of money and how to look after it, yet this is a critical life skill that should be taught as part of the school curriculum. Do you agree or disagree?

Some school kids are taught monetary
value
and how to take special care of it,
however
, it is a major life skill that should be included in the school’s
curriculum
and taught.
This
essay agrees that monetary
value
should be included in
schools
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school
curriculum
and taught as well because of its importance. In my opinion, teaching school kids monetary
value
will make them more responsible and
also
learn how to make
money
rather than
been
the state or fact of existing
being
spoon fed.
Firstly
, responsibility goes a very long way in people’s life and it helps Tom
ow
belonging to or on behalf of a specified person (especially yourself); preceded by a possessive
own
now
how best you can be put in charge of some things. The inclusion of monetary
value
in the schools’
curriculum
has made many kids responsible by knowing how best to take care of it, what is meant for and how to spend it.
However
,
this
has made them to be responsible
to
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for
their various homes and country at large.
For example
, kids who are taught
this skills
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these skills
this skill
are seen to hold
better position
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a better position
in the future because they were exposed to the act of caring
,
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,
keeping and spending at a very
little
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least
age unlike
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age, unlike
there
of them or themselves
their
other counterparts who does not know what to do with it or how to care and keep safe which has lead to lavish spending.
Secondly
, addition of monetary
value
in
schools
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the school curriculum
school curriculum
curriculum
has made the kids to be taught how
to make
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making
more
money
by
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from
their teachers rather than waiting to be given by their parents. Children are exposed
at
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on
their stage to know that making
money
is their responsibility and not to be given at all times.
For instance
, research shows that children who are taught the rudiment of
money
making
become
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becomes
very rich and famous.
while
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While
kids who are not tend to depend on them to feed their families and become a liability to the nation. To conclude, the inclusion of monetary
value
in the
schools
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school
school's
curriculum
has helped to sharpen the mindset of kids thereby making them responsible to the nation
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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