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You play a team sport with some friends. Last week a member of the team had an accident and wasn't able to play with you Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: • Tell him which team won • Describe the weather conditions that day • Say how you felt about the match

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Dear Raman, I hope
this
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 letter finds you in
best
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 of your health. I am writing
this
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 letter to share with
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great joy that our
team
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 won the final match of
cricket
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the cricket
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 tournament held in Chandigarh
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 Sunday. It was a very inspiring
team
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 effort, which produced the desired result, as we were up against a very tough opponent. The match venue was
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 College playground in Sector 32. Apart from the opposition most challenging part was the weather conditions, as the Monsoon season is going on owing to that the day was very hot and humid. Many of us were feeling dehydrated
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 excessive perspiration but our
team
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 was motivated enough to focus on our objective of performing well. Our victory was not easy, as we were chasing a huge total of 186 runs in 20 overs. But as I have already mentioned
that
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It was a
team
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 effort and
self belief
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 that encouraged us to showcase
that
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what our
team
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 is capable of doing. Despite all that happened in the match one thing I must confess
that
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 your absence made a huge impact on our bowling strength
,
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 because it is always difficult to make up for a prime bowler like you. In the
end
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 I wish you a speedy recovery and I am looking forward to hearing from you. Yours lovingly, Jatinder.
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task achievement
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task achievement
The letter effectively communicates the main points required by the task.
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The tone of the letter is friendly and appropriate for writing to a friend.
coherence and cohesion
The greeting and closing parts of the letter are well-executed.
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