In some countries, increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast foods. Therefore, government should impose higher taxes in this kind of food. Do you agree/ disagree.

Due to urbanization and exposure to the multiple cuisines, people are inclining more towards the junk food which is prone to numerous health ailments. Some people are of the opinion that as these foods is unhealthy, government should
also
impose strict taxes against them. I accord with
this
statement. There are umpteen factors why individuals should not consume fast foods.
First
and foremost reason is that these foods have
high amount
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a high amount
high amounts
of toxic ingredients like Monosodium glutamate, palm
oil which
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oil, which
makes these foods feel good
on
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at
tongue, so people consume high amounts of these foods which results in genetic disorders in children.
For instance
, reports have shown Maggi contains more than triple
amount
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amounts
of allowed lead and children love eating
maggi
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Maggi
magi
made
on daily basis which results in multiple disorders in them
on
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in
later stages. Another reason is that high consumption of fast foods leads to obesity and as we all know obese people suffer from heart, liver and kidney disorders like cardiac arrest, kidney stones, liver failure etc.
For example
, In America,
plethora
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a plethora
of people is suffering from obesity and heart diseases and the reason is excessive consumption of fast-food in their daily routine.
However fast
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However, fast
foods are dangerous, green vegetables are not safe either. Due to excessive use of pesticides and fertilizers while growing crops, people who consume fruits and green vegetables
also
suffer from health problems.
For example
, In India, myriad individuals are suffering from genetic disorders as farmers use pesticides and fertilizers in their fields and sometimes they inject artificial
colors
a flag that shows its nationality
colours
in fruits to grow them quickly. To encapsulate,
although
enormous intake
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the enormous intake
of fast-food is dangerous and there should be strict measures to restrict their consumption, government
first
make sure that the other means of food like green vegetables and fruits are
also
safe to consume.
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