Being a celebrity can bring benefits and problems at the same time. To what extent do you agree on this statement?

A famous
person
or
celebrity
become
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becomes
popular through
media
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the media
as well as due to people
celebrity
brings benefits along with problems.
To begin
with, there are many benefits of being a
celebrity
.
Firstly
, as a
celebrity
become its own image or dignity. Every one
know
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knows
to
famous
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a famous person
famous people
person
.
Secondly
, every
person
give
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gives
regards and respect to the famous
person
.
For example
, Amir Khan is
famous personality
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a famous personality
. Most of the people give respect and like his acting, work or physique.
Thirdly
, famous
person
have
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has
more money, comfort devices and more property.
Moreover they
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Moreover, they
can bring what they want.
On the other hand
, there are more problems for
celebrity
.
First
of all, famous
person
cannot go anywhere lonely and cannot enjoy freedom with family.
Moreover
, famous
person
does not have enough time for their family and
persue
carry out or participate in an activity; be involved in
pursue
their hobbies.
Furthermore
, famous
person
have
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has
to go anywhere with security because of the crowd.
In addition
to
this
, due to
popularity
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popular
media always spread
news
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the news
regarding famous
person
.
Moreover
, media create issues regarding personal or
families
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family
family's
problems. In conclusion,
being a famous film star or sports man take
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will a famous film star or sports man take
being a famous film star or sportsman take
has a famous film star or sports man taken
was a famous film star or sports man taking
is a famous film star or sports man taking
was a famous film star or sports man taken
more
benefits but
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benefits, but
, we cannot
denied
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deny
about negative effects.

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