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People naturally resist making changes in their lives. What kind of problems can this cause? What solutions can you suggest?

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Life
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 is something that should be valuable to every
people
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person
. Unfortunately, as it may be expected, humankind confronts with transformation in their
life
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.
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 can cause two problems, namely emaciated outlook on
life
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 and even loneliness.
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, there are many helpful advices to rely on,
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 as discovering new hobbies and broaden the surroundings. Resisting any changes in
life
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 is the
straightway
a straight segment of a roadway or racecourse
straightaway
 to have a very narrow view on
life
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. As we know, changes make people happier and influence on the one’s perception. When there are stable principles in
life
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 for a long time, man
become
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becomes
 stressed and ignorant person. Misunderstanding other people beliefs or ideas can lead a man to feel of desolation from society.
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, the more people resist making changes in their lives, the more they become aggressive introvert, who
can not
can not
cannot
 feel empathy to other people’s troubles. There are two solutions I can suggest in order to prevent the consequences of loneliness and ignorance. The
life
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 is more enjoyable, when
people try
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people, try
 new things to do they never did before. Whenever one feels
comfort
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comfortable
, but inside understands there is something wrong with
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comfort
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comfortable
life
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, I would advise to force themselves start doing sport, start
learn
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learning
 new literature, anything that could broaden the outlook on everything around.
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 can
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 lead to new meetings, with people from different situations and countries. Once the change is started,
life
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 will never be like before. It is extremely important to take responsibility
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of
for
 your own
life
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, as only you the one who can make a difference. To avoid problems with socializing and deep destructive feeling people better start to
color
a visual attribute of things that results from the light they emit or transmit or reflect
colour
clear
 their
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lives
life
 until they have time.
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