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Violence in the media promotes violent activities? To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is important to consider how
violence
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 influences people, and what its root causes are? While some people contend that
one
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 of the major
reason
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reasons
 of
violence
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 is media, other deem that it is
trifial
(informal) small and of little importance
trivial
. I tend to partially agree with the statement, and in
this
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 essay, I will support my views with examples.
To begin
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,
medias
a means or instrumentality for storing or communicating information
media
 may promote
violence
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 in the community, for it often engenders violent content, and
this
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 may
subconsiously
from the subconscious mind
subconsciously
 inflict individuals.
This
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 is because people may imitate dreadful
behaviors
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviours
behaviour
 learnt through
medias
a means or instrumentality for storing or communicating information
media
;
also
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, they might copy the know-how of crimes.
For example
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, a person, who goes through violent contents regularly, is likable to
commite
perform an act, usually with a negative connotation
commit
 misdeeds than
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 who
doesnot
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does not
.
However
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, if
medias
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the media
media
 do not bombard
violent news
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the violent news
, people will not be
pschologically
with regard to psychology
psychologically
 craved to involve in
one
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.
This
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 happens because people may not be aware about
crime unless
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crime, unless
medias
a means or instrumentality for storing or communicating information
media
 promote violent conducts.
Nonetheless
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,
medias
a means or instrumentality for storing or communicating information
media
 are not the only
one
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 to blame.
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For
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 clarity, it may have something to do with the upbringing;
for example
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, a person, who is exposed to the hard-up childhood, is likely to involve in the criminal intent.
In addition
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, some may have an innate violent nature.
For instance
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, some notorious leaders like
hitler
German Nazi dictator during World War II (1889-1945)
Hitler
, as said by some scholars, had inborn mental defects, so they were violent.
Besides
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 that,
medias
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the media
media
also
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 promote
benefitial
promoting or enhancing well-being
beneficial
 programs,
therefore
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, we should not always blame
medias
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the media
media
 for chronic
crimial
someone who has committed a crime or has been legally convicted of a crime
criminal
 conducts. In conclusion,
although
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medias
a means or instrumentality for storing or communicating information
media
 promote
violence
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, for it influences people
subconsiously
from the subconscious mind
subconsciously
 and they may imitate harmful activities, we must take into consideration the upbringings and innate character.
Thus
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, I partially agree with the arguments.

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