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Violence in the media promotes violent activities? To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#violence #media #activities
It is important to consider how
violence
 influences people, and what its root causes are? While some people contend that
one
 of the major
reason
Suggestion
reasons
 of
violence
 is media, other deem that it is
trifial
(informal) small and of little importance
trivial
. I tend to partially agree with the statement, and in
this
 essay, I will support my views with examples.
To begin
,
medias
a means or instrumentality for storing or communicating information
media
 may promote
violence
 in the community, for it often engenders violent content, and
this
 may
subconsiously
from the subconscious mind
subconsciously
 inflict individuals.
This
 is because people may imitate dreadful
behaviors
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviours
behaviour
 learnt through
medias
a means or instrumentality for storing or communicating information
media
;
also
, they might copy the know-how of crimes.
For example
, a person, who goes through violent contents regularly, is likable to
commite
perform an act, usually with a negative connotation
commit
 misdeeds than
one
 who
doesnot
Suggestion
does not
.
However
, if
medias
Suggestion
the media
media
 do not bombard
violent news
Suggestion
the violent news
, people will not be
pschologically
with regard to psychology
psychologically
 craved to involve in
one
.
This
 happens because people may not be aware about
crime unless
Accept comma addition
crime, unless
medias
a means or instrumentality for storing or communicating information
media
 promote violent conducts.
Nonetheless
,
medias
a means or instrumentality for storing or communicating information
media
 are not the only
one
 to blame.
To
Suggestion
For
With
 clarity, it may have something to do with the upbringing;
for example
, a person, who is exposed to the hard-up childhood, is likely to involve in the criminal intent.
In addition
, some may have an innate violent nature.
For instance
, some notorious leaders like
hitler
German Nazi dictator during World War II (1889-1945)
Hitler
, as said by some scholars, had inborn mental defects, so they were violent.
Besides
 that,
medias
Suggestion
the media
media
also
 promote
benefitial
promoting or enhancing well-being
beneficial
 programs,
therefore
, we should not always blame
medias
Suggestion
the media
media
 for chronic
crimial
someone who has committed a crime or has been legally convicted of a crime
criminal
 conducts. In conclusion,
although
medias
a means or instrumentality for storing or communicating information
media
 promote
violence
, for it influences people
subconsiously
from the subconscious mind
subconsciously
 and they may imitate harmful activities, we must take into consideration the upbringings and innate character.
Thus
, I partially agree with the arguments.
Submitted by boharauttam07 on

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