The government should allocate more fund to the educational sector than health sector.At what extent do you agree or disagree.

Government should provide financial aid to educational
sector
rather than
health
care delivery. In my own opinion, I feel the
health
sector
deserves more funding.
This
essay will pinpoint
reasons
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the reasons
.
Health
is wealth
,
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,
this
is
know
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known
to be a popular adage.
An
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A
healthy nation is a wealthy nation. Without adequate funding in the
health
care
sector many
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sector, many
citizen
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citizens
of a national will not be able to get good
health
care and
this
can lead to detrimental effects.
For
example in
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example, in
developed countries like America where the
health
of all its members
are
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is
very paramount
,
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,
it can be seen that there is increased productivity in
such
countries. There is
state
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a state
of the art medical equipment to diagnose and treat any medical conditions because the
health
sector
is fully
equiped
provided or fitted out with what is necessary or useful or appropriate
equipped
.No wonder why our own politicians and the rich people in the society run abroad with any little
ailment but
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ailment, but
here in Nigeria thousands of people die yearly due to
ailment
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an ailment
that could be treated if there were to be medical equipments
On the Contrary
, failure in the educational system is
also
a failure
to
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for
of
the economy.Ignorance they say is a disease. When the educational
sector
is left unfunded
then
we should expect an influx of illiterates in the society.
This
illetracy
ignorance resulting from not reading
illiteracy
also affect
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also affects
health
somehow. Research has shown that
illetracy
ignorance resulting from not reading
illiteracy
has a negative impact on the
health
seeking behaviour of people.Take
for example
a person with
kidney
problem will rather take herbal
concotions
any foodstuff made by combining different ingredients
concoctions
connections
concessions
which will
further
injure the
kidney
or better still the
kidney
will pack up
,
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,
they are ignorant of the detriments of
concotions
a relation between things or events (as in the case of one causing the other or sharing features with it)
connections
concessions
to a failed
kidney
.If they were educated
this
would have been prevented.
Moreso
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More so
,
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,
one can be educated and education will not reflect
in
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on
the person's character or behaviour..Education is not only about going to school.
Also there
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Also, there
are alternatives to
been
the state or fact of existing
being
educated
,
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,
one can decide to learn skills rather than going to school but
health
can not be compromised. In conclusion
,
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,
education and
health
sector
requires funding by the Government
,
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,
health
sector
should be paramount because of the numerous disadvantages a failed
health
system might cause the nation.
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