These days, cell (mobile) phones and the internet are very important to the ways in which people relate to one another socially. Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

It is rare these days to find someone who does not use the
cell
phone
or the
internet
to react other other.
Although
, the
broad
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using of these
technology
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technologies
, I believe that the drawback of
this
development
outweigh
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outweighs
their benefits. One of the main
disadvantage
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disadvantages
of
cell
phone
and
internet
socially is the affection on the human personality due to speak
behinde
further back than; at the back of; at the far side of
behind
screen
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the screen
screens
or using
cell
phone
hide some of social communication skills and promote some bad benefits
such
as shy whereas the
face
to
face
remove
this
kind of barrier in speaking
.
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.
In addition
, some people show all the details of their life on social networks Facebook, Snapchat;
consequently
, exploit that information in
wrong way
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the wrong way
a wrong way
.
Furthermore
,
this
connection may cause
misunderstand
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misunderstanding
in some matter between
people which
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people, which
mainly not occurred in
face
to
face
communication because in the
last
ones peoples can discuss more to clarify the idea and presence of language body help too. Despite of
this
disadvantages
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disadvantage
, there are several important advantages.
Firstly
, the
internet
and
cell
phones help people to stay contact with persons who love regardless of the distance between them and time so, give them a chance to make new relations
.
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.
Secondly
, parents by
internet
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the internet
and
cell
phone
can keep in touch with their children who are on holiday. In conclusion, the
technology including
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technology, including
cell
phones and the
internet
is like weapon with two sides
.
Accept space
.
we
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We
should aware about the pros and
cons to develop
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cons, develop
cons develop
the society positively.
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