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Many people find it hard to balance their work with other parts of their lives. What are the reasons for this? How this problem can be overcome?

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Majority of
population
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the population
find
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finds
 it tough to
balance
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 their office
work
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 and personal and family
life
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. There are lots of reasons for
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 unbalance
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life
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life, such
such
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 as longer working hours,
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work load
work that a person is expected to do in a specified time
workload
, improper working practices etc.
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, these problems can be tackled by proper
time
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 management, adopting set working practices
such
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 as 3M and six-sigma, priority decisions etc. Most of the employee’s face
this
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 critical problem of unbalanced working style which compromises a lot of other counterpart of
life
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. Nowadays,
organization
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the organization
 setting a lot of pressure on employee’s in order to meet their targets and market demands.
This
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 phenomenon leads to longer
work
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time
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, fatigue is
common problem
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a common problem
 due to extra working hours and
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this
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 will result in less efficiency and productivity at
work
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.
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, Japanese people and their
work
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 culture are known for their hard
work
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 and
extremely longer period
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extremely long periods
extremely long period
an extremely long period
 of working hours. They spend their around 75%
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life
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live
in
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in, work
work
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 only,
in addition
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 to
this
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 due to
work
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 fatigue many of them were found dead on their desk at
office
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the office
.
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,
this
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 issue can be resolved by accepting and following proper
work
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 ethics and
managements
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management
 tools. Setting appropriate working hours, following
time
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 and
work
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 management tools
such
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 as six-sigma, 3M. People need to understand and decide their priorities to
balance
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 their
life
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 in order to spend
time
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 with friends and family.
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, The Tata organization in India initiated
time
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 management and focused on efficient working practices in order to minimize working hours by adopting
PMP tool
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a PMP tool
 at Pune.
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, employees were interviewed and found that they have more
time
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 for their other
life
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 events and priorities. In conclusion, there are many reasons why people are unable to
balance
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 their
lives but
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lives, but
this
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 problem can be resolved by adopting proper working techniques and practices. At the end of the day, it is so important to
balance
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work
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 and
other part
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other parts
 of
life
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.
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