Today, the quality of life in large cities is decreasing.  Discuss the causes and solutions.

The
quality
of
life
in large cities is decreasing. If something is not done to combat
this
issue, the
quality
of
life
will continue on decreasing. More and more people move into large cities in order to avail the facilities which smaller cities don’t provide as much. Larger cities have more job opportunities for people
,
Accept space
,
and provide  more health care facilities, more educational facilities, and more entertainment.
However
, as more people start moving into large cities, the demands of people start to outweigh the supply. In Dubai, where I live,
for example
, so many people had moved into the city
last
year that there were more people and less housing units to facilitate them. When the demand becomes more than the supply,  the price of everything starts to rise. 
Therfore
Suggestion
Therefore
, the rents started to reach the peaks.
This
forced people who
wernt
were not
weren't
able to afford the skyrocketing rents to move into smaller and cheaper apartments, or to go on sharing apartments with one or more families.
Supply demand
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Supply, demand
imbalance has
also
caused food to become more expensive, forcing people to go for alternative, cheaper products of lower
quality
. If we start to work now, we can help improve the
quality
of
life
in big cities in the near future. Construction companies need to plan ahead and start constructing more housing units from now.
Furthermore
, more
of
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about
on
local food should be produced in the country to provide people with cheaper food alternatives in the growing market In conclusion, larger cities have lower the standard of
life
for many.
However
, if we start to work now, we would be able to combat
this
problem in the near future 
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