Some people think that a huge amount of time and money is spent on the protection of wild animals, and that this money could be better spent on the human population.To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Recently, many creatures are
putted
put into a certain place or abstract location
put
in danger by enormous not only human actions but
also
living conditions change.
Therefore
a lot of
money
need to use to protect them,
however
, there
are
Suggestion
is
an idea that we spent too much time and budget on conservation and we should cut down on it
then
transfer to the citizens. I strongly disagree with
this
one because we still do not pay enough for some serious problems around wild animals. In fact, more and more wild animals vanished in the past few years, that need our hands to recover and guard the remain species. In many cases, people
is
Suggestion
are
the biggest factor lead to
this
problem because we have some demands in many fields like killing for
meal
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a meal
meals
, reducing animal habitats for
agricultrure
a large-scale farming enterprise
agriculture
and
bussiness
a commercial or industrial enterprise and the people who constitute it
business
.
For example
, whale is greatest animal is our
planet but
Accept comma addition
planet, but
it is on the edge of extinction because many countries accept killing
whale
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a whale
whales
is a significant
bussiness
a commercial or industrial enterprise and the people who constitute it
business
businesses
due to
high value
Suggestion
the high value
of their meat including
japan
a constitutional monarchy occupying the Japanese Archipelago; a world leader in electronics and automobile manufacture and ship building
Japan
and some
northen
in or characteristic of a region of the United States north of (approximately) the Mason-Dixon line
northern
Northern
europe
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European
Europe
countries.
Thus
, with
small number
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a small number
of
member
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members
in species, whale
need
Suggestion
needs
massive campaigns to prevent companies to kill them that require uncountable efforts of
our
things belonging to us
ours
. In terms of protecting wild animals, we have many rough issues to face with like lack of budget in the poor
coutries
a politically organized body of people under a single government
countries
, hard approach to animals in nature and
incertain
lacking or indicating lack of confidence or assurance
uncertain
in certain
awareness of people that must change as soon as possible
,
Accept space
,
otherwise
, our
next
generations might be
unafforable
to see some rare and beautiful species suck as tiger, leopard and ape. To solve
this
problem, governments should pay more attention and
money
to encourage
public
Suggestion
the public
and organizations to preserve wild animals with various methods which appropriate
with
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to
them.
On the contrary
, our society still
have
Suggestion
has
many problems that need budget of public and
goverment
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
government
. Take economic growth as an example, in many developing countries necessary things are spending
money
on industry, education and heal care of their people
first
. Indeed, some excessive funding for
help
Suggestion
helping
animals is waste resource. In conclusion,
although
some restrictions
,
Accept space
,
however
, we still need
supply
Suggestion
to supply
more time,
money
to help wild animals have
a shelter live
Suggestion
a shelter to live
and create a biodiversity like it was in the past.
Submitted by Serhii Baraniuk on

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